The Toffee Apple Prank

Category: Slice of Life

“Look what I made you!” my mum said to me on my birthday.

“Ooohhh! Thanks, it looks delicious!” I whispered,whispered, starestaring with wide eyes at the round shape on the stick with its shell of shineshiny red toffee.toffee. “Can I eat it now?” But Mum said I would have to wait until after dinner,dinner, and then I could have it for dessert.dessert.  

I ate my way through the spaghettispaghetti and meatballsmeatballs on my plate and then waitedwaited patientlypatiently for the table to be cleared.cleared. My big sister brought over the toffee apples. Their flat bottoms,bottoms, where the toffee had collectedcollected in a kind of puddle,puddle, were balancebalancing on the tray while the sticks pokedpoked up in the air, ready for a hand to grasp them and carrycarry them up to the mouth for a bite.

I closedclosed my eyes and thought about how they would taste – the sweet crunch of the toffee once my sharp teeth had bittenbitten through, and then the slightly sour tang of the juicy apple.

Mum offeredoffered me the biggestbiggest and roundestroundest one since I was the birthdaybirthday boy. I beamed the biggest smile and brought it to my mouth. My front teeth slitheredslithered over the slipperyslippery candy the first time and I could not get a good bite. The second time I openedopened my mouth widerwider and managedmanaged to sink my front and back teeth in. I took a huge chunk out. I wondered,wondered, just before I startedstarted my first chew, why Mum and Dad and my sister were starestaring at me like I was some kind of experimentexperiment and they were scientists.scientists. I got the toffee taste and crunch but insteadinstead of the hard, juicy tartnesstartness of the apple, there was a slushy,slushy, eye-watering,watering, bitterbitter taste in my mouth. I spat it out and glaredglared at my family. “Yuck!” I squealed. “What was that?”

Do notDon’t   you like toffee onions then?” laughedlaughed my Mum. “I guess you hadyou’d    better have one of the apple ones then!”


Clarify these words: shell, dessert, collected, grasp, sour, tang, beamed, slithered, slippery, candy, managed, experiment, scientists, slushy, eye-watering, bitter, glared.

Retell what has happened in this Slice of Life.

What prediction can you made about what might have happened next?

Make inferences or give opinions about:

  • Why the writer might be looking wide eyed.
  • What the shell is.
  • What the puddle is and why it forms.
  • What the contrasting tastes and textures are in a toffee apple.
  • What the smile is being compared to.
  • Why its so hard for the writer to get a bite in.
  • Why opening your mouth wide and sinking in both top and bottom teeth might help.
  • How and why the family were looking strangely at the writer.
  • What is the same and what is different about the toffee onion. 
  • What raw onion might be like to eat. 
  • How the writer's mum behaved at the end.
  • How the writer probably felt at the end.


What question could you ask about this Slice of Life?

Visualise these uses of descriptive language: staring with wide eyes; round shape on the stick with its shell of shiny red toffee; flat bottoms where the toffee had collected in a kind of puddle; the sweet crunch of the toffee; the slightly sour tang of the juicy apple; I beamed the biggest smile; my front teeth slithered over the slippery candy; opened my mouth wider and managed to sink my front and back teeth in; staring at me like I was some kind of experiment and they were the scientists; toffee taste and crunch; instead of hard, juicy tartness, there was a slushy, eye-watering, bitter taste.

Make a connection with this narrative so far.

Word Study

Verb endings: What happens when we add s, ed or ing to: stare, balance, poke, carry, manage, glare, hope.

Other affixes: What happens when we add other prefixes and suffixes like yly, en, est, er, ness to these words: shine, juice, slip, slush, patient, slight, bite, big, round, wide, tart. 

What two words make up these compound wordsmeatballs, birthday, instead.

What two words make up these contractions here: don't, you'd.